{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"61297986","dateCreated":"1358993781","smartDate":"Jan 23, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"Cam.Willette","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cam.Willette","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/camwillettewikifolio.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/61297986"},"dateDigested":1532174678,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Peer Review","description":"General posts about the Wiki","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"59895704","body":"I\u2019ve read a lot of Cameron\u2019s essays.  I agree that he should continue the practice of organizing his thoughts before he starts to write.  We\u2019ve discussed how he\u2019ll have a better flow and get his points across if he outlines the messages or content he was to present in his writing.  I\u2019ve also suggested that he reads his papers out loud so that he can pick up where he needs to correct sentence structure, unnecessary commas, and long sentences that should be developed into multiple sentences.  It\u2019s clear to me that Cameron understands the materials, he should just continue to find techniques that will help him present his thoughts clearly. -Lori Willette","dateCreated":"1358996147","smartDate":"Jan 23, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"Cam.Willette","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Cam.Willette","imageUrl":"https:\/\/ssl.wikicdn.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"59901726","body":"There is a nice range of different types of writing here and I like that. I especially liked looking through the college essay and the Catcher imitation piece because it is clear how much you really care about music and football. It's nice to see the passion come through in the writing. The organization of essays is definitely important, so I am glad to hear that you set that goal and achieved it. I think it would have been interesting to see another, more recent, analytical essay on here to compare the organization from the summer reading essay, but like I said, the range of works on here was really enjoyable to read.","dateCreated":"1359037043","smartDate":"Jan 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"AllysonRedhunt","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/AllysonRedhunt","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1358988678\/AllysonRedhunt-lg.jpg"}},{"id":"59915260","body":"Hey Cammy, <br \/>\nFirst off, wow. There is some really great work in here. You definitely have spot-on self analysis when you say that you can write more freely when you pick your topic. Even when you have to mold free writing into a certain style, as in your imitative pieces, you manage to have a profound voice full of passion. I really enjoyed reading your work. Definitely the analysis at the beginning was disorganized, but that was\/is the case for so many people, and I'm sure you've already improved vastly there. Well done, pal.","dateCreated":"1359058143","smartDate":"Jan 24, 2013","userCreated":{"username":"saxysullivan","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/saxysullivan","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1289432798\/saxysullivan-lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}